First draft analasys, with feedback.

Evaluation of first draft,

Overall I was pleased with how all the clips linked together, I thought there was a really good flow to the film opening and for the majority of the time I think that the audience could follow what was happening throughout the opening, the shots all linked together and there was good continuity; this was a worry when we were filming. However we went back and reshot some linking shots between the running. I also think that there are a few establishing shots that may not be needed (01:18). The final point I think we can improve on (without comparison to the mark scheme) is that while watching it I feel that it didn't feel like watching a film opening, it looked more like a music video with the continual music over the background. We have discussed this as a group and for the next edit we plan to focus a lot more on the soundtrack.

Feedback from audience.

"I love the moments in it like when Sean puts his headphones in.I think you could probably use some other shot transitions because at the moment it sometimes seems like you use that blurred transition a little too much."


"You could add more sound effects."

"I liked your video a lot!!!"

"All the shots were steady and the continuity was very effective.  The soundtrack was good and it faded in and out nicely. I liked it when time passed by and you sped it up, however sometimes the shots stuttered."

"Would've liked more ambient sound to create atmosphere and build tension"

In comparison to the mark scheme, and Mr. Wroe's feedback.

Holding shot steady. - [Generally excellent]
I think that the majority of shots fulfill this area of the mark scheme, the only one in which I can see any problem with the steadiness of the shot is the scene 1:04-1:14, however I don't think that this is a big problem and even if we re-shot the scene (which we may do) it may not make a huge difference as it is so hard to get a completely steady shot while moving with the camera (without the use of equipment we don't own). Other than this scene and the point of view shots (where the camera is meant to be shaky and unsteady) every scene is very steady.
Framing shot appropriately. [Many excellent examples, didn't like ECU of the clothing]

I think some scenes may need to be refilmed for our final edit, particularly the start of the chase scene, some audiences asked me to explain this part as they didn't understand it so I think we need to refilm it to make sure it is clear what is happening (I also think that sound will help aid this)
Variety of shot distances. [Much excellence and variety]
I believe there were enough shot distances, perhaps more extreme close ups/ extreme long shots would add to the variety however I don't think this is vital as we already have a wide range.
Appropriate material to task. [Excellent, feels like a journey to an unfamiliar town]
As I mentioned earlier I think that the only material that didn't work was in the middle starting with the establishing shots at (01:18) I think that it seems as though the main character starts running for no reason.
Selecting mise-en-scène. [Excellent use of urban mise en scene]
I felt all shots mise-en-scenes linked together and it felt as though they were in the same place adding to the continuity.
Editing for meaning to viewer. [Excellent editing. Still some room for improvement but very encouraging indeed]
I thought that although the majority of the opening (particularly the start) is edited together well I thought that it became confusing in the middle of the opening, 
Varied shot transitions, captions and other effects. [The sped up footage while he is sat on bench is excellent, so are the disappearing effects towards the end of the opening, brilliant use of bus handle for transition]
Although there was little variety in shot transition which is an area for improvement, I thought the transition mentioned by Mr Wroe worked very well, once again we had no typography in this draft so the captions can't be considered. As for effects we plan on changing the disappearing effect.
Use of sound with images and editing. [Some improvement on sound needed felt the track was appropriate but more diegetic sound]
I don't think that the soundtrack worked very well in this opening as there was no ambient sound, this was confirmed with audience feedback as audiences said they felt that more ambient sound was needed. Also the only dialogue in the scene cannot be heard very well and is cut off by the music at the end.
Using titles appropriately.

No titles were used so this is obviously a large area for improvement.

What we need to improve on..

• Wider range of shot distance's and camera angles
• e.g at the start of the chase scene when Sean reached the canal, we could use a dutch/cant angle to create a feeling of something being wrong
•  I feel like we had a majority of medium shots it would be good to shoot a few extreme close ups or extreme wide shots
• Variance of shot transitions, established from feedback some different transitions other than the blurred transition.
• A more realistic soundtrack, as opposed to just a constant song we need to add more ambient sound such as footsteps, cars, breathing e.t.c
• Although it isn't a particular area for improvement we are also going to change the effect of the disappearing effect as we feel that it could add to the opening.